I respect your opinion

But my ear bud can never be trusted again after what it just produced

I see what you are conveying but I feel the message is cluttered with attempts at discovery of rhyme, sophistication in the choice of words, and lacks cadence

I think if you just keep writing you will calm down and find your core meaning wrapped in a melody of words

I like it. But I suppose I'm a fan of scenery painted quickly so I'm probably biased. Vivid imagery, I can feel sharp cold air and hear the crackle of the smoke as he draws from a third persons perspective

Or even from the window you peeked as you spotted him early morn

Such an awful yearning expressed

If only our feet couldn't lead us astray through myriad of bureaucratic spasms, one could walk and walk until the sun sets in the right places

Such personal pain conveyed abruptly

I wish to just smile and whisper as I walk on by

They can only make sure their own lies, and leave you with all of reality to yourself, to enjoy

Sadness as a travel companion offers a laser focus through the dark tunnel of hopelessness. Keep towards the light

I really liked this

It painted a sick picture in my mind, and there was a point to it

What are we now, if not beyond humanity living in virtual planes drawn by the mind conjured by data

Determined in solitude, so bitter the brew

Nicely written

Nicely written and uplifting

Perhaps a conscious decision to be is all that we need for change